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The main point of the draft is about Barrick Gold Corporation however, she (Nancy) does not have a thesis sentence yet.

An instance that I consider interesting and at the same time useful example is where Nancy explain about the Valle del Cura a told us what the Barrick Corporation did to that place and still talking about them saving the environment. This is the passage: "According to a show from Argentina called La Liga which is a show that questions they actions of the Government and protects the environment. Pascua Lama is located near a beautiful paradise that is called Valle del Cura (valley of the priest) in San Juan Argentina. Valle del Cura is one of the most amazing places in the province with a diversity of animals and plants which is the fountain of profit by the tourist in San Juan. The problem is that they only way to reach this valley a person has to cross the so called routes of the province (rutas provinciales) however this is impossible because this routes are blocked by Barrick corporation. Therefore any tourist that wants to go to this paradise is not allow to do so by Barrick workers or security guards in the routes, the consequences, no profit from tourist. By further investigation by the crew of La Liga we obtain new information first of all they found out that Barrick is not located near the valley is on the valley. Now a tourist place that was full of plants, animals and rivers is now a day a mine, where there is no plants, no animals, and no source of water for the people near the valley since the river is totally contaminated and the water is used by for the mining. "

I think there is anything boring in the draft, however I believe that others might find the chronological dates were suppost to be in sentences.

Moreoer, she did a good job at acknowledging where the information came from in the body. She also did a good job at proof reading her work, because she does not have grammar.